Writing To Argue

Dear Mrs Hopkins,

For many years the journalism industry has created nasty characters with strong, questionable opinions. However when I came across your article, I was viciously troubled. I commend you for your bravery – not a lot of people would have the courage to be as disrespectful and verbally violent as you. ‘Feral humans.’ That’s what you call migrants who are fleeing from a war, migrants who are looking for better lives. The thing that makes me laugh is that you thought you were covert enough to get away with racial abuse. It is outrageous how you describe human beings as ‘cockroaches’. Cockroaches are known to be pests, vermin and unpleasant insects that carry dangerous diseases. Therefore you seem to believe that the migrants are just pests who will bring nothing but overpopulation and diseases. This type of offensive language is unacceptable and just plain shallow. What were you thinking?

Europe is a very special and powerful continent. You know that, I know that, but the thing you don’t know is that other continents, other countries, are also special and make a crucial contribution to the UK’s economy. So your comment stating Italians need to “stop singing opera, drinking espresso and looking chic in chuffing everything” is rude and inapproriate. According to statistics, the migrants that enter the UK create more money than they take out: since 2000, migrants have contributed £25 billion to the UK economy, migrants have worked more and received less than the average Briton and between 2001-11 migrants have paid 34% more in taxes than benefits. So why do you describe these migrants as a “plague”?

I accept that in recent years the UK has received a flood of migrants that has led to higher competitiveness in jobs and that migration has been a drain on resources. However, migration is a vital form of help and protection for vulnerable migrants who are in crisis. If we don’t reach out to take people in, we will have death and suffering on our conscience for years to come. They don’t deserve unneeded criticism from you, Mrs Hopkins, instead they need empathy from British citizens.

Migration brings innovation and cultural, vibrant energy to the UK, allowing the UK to embrace new cultures and ideas to enrich the country. From 1685-1700, the UK took in 100,000 French Protestants, over 200,000 Eastern-European Jews sought refuge in the UK from 1880-1914 and a quarter of a million Polish refugees settled in the UK in the Second World War. This an enourmous amount, especially considering that the British were not as influencial and powerful during the 16th and 17th century. Also the migrants have had a significant role in British culture and society such as: Sir Montague Burton, the founder of Burton Menswear, Micheal Marks, who is the founder of Marks and Spencer and Karl Marx, a famous economist and philosopher. The significance of the famous migrants is that they have contributed positively to the UK. But yet you say you would “use gunships to stop migrants”, migrants who possibly could help shape British society for the better? Why?

But that is not point. The point is that we need to offer these migrants an opportunity to escape from their problems and gain entrance to a new, brighter start. It is strange how the UK has only 2% of the world’s refugees and yet an 2002 opinion poll revealed that British citizens feel that we host 26%. Where has this negative climate towards migrants come from, who can we blame for this? Perhaps these assumptions are due to poor and bias media coverage from journalists like you, Mrs Hopkins. Who held minorities in slavery and captivity for hundreds of years? White people were responsible. But yet you have the nerve to still accuse and shame these minorities who need help.

As a black student, how would it look if I went and called all my white teachers maggots? How would society view me? White people would condemn what I said and the hungry for stories media would ridicule me harshly because of my black skin colour. Martin Luther King fought for equality for every race in America, but yet your views do the exact opposite and prey upon the vulnerable minorities.

 

 


3 Responses to “Writing To Argue”

  • jobrien Says:

    Gabriel,

    Please have a look at the following things:

    1) have a look at expression throughout. There are some places where it is not as tight as it should be. You have said that migrants contribute more, for example, but then said that they also take out more.

    2) You need to drill home your point in paragraph four. What’s the double standard? Why is the previous history of migrants to the UK important?

    3) think of a stronger conclusion than that final line. It’s not quite there yet

  • jobrien Says:

    Hi Gabriel,

    As promised, here are the improvements:

    1) there is a lot of direct address to Mrs Hopkins. If you reduce this it will be more effective throughout

    2) think about the start of paragraphs. Are they all as effective as the start of the fifth paragraph?

    3) keep working on that final conclusion..

  • jobrien Says:

    Hi Gabriel,

    This is very good indeed. Just two things:

    1) I think it would be more effective to say, ‘white people’ and just end it there re: the slavery point

    2) Condone is to accept something. Condemn is to say something is bad.

    This is at 37/40 – A1. One mark and you’ll be at A”

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