Letter to Lady Macbeth

Dear wife,

These supernatural beings approached me after I returned from my triumphant battle. They told me many good reports about my future, then they turned into air and vanished. I do not have a single ounce in trust in these beings,. My wife, I wanted to question them further on their ‘prophecies’. Just like they ‘proclaimed’ I received a promotion in the ranks, a very high position indeed. These beings also claimed that I shall be the next king, quote Hail, king that
shalt be!’ Consequently I had a meeting with King Duncan and his son Malcolm. They have a desire to meet us at our castle. This could be my chance to end the king’s rein and begin my reign as king!
Now my dearest wife, I have not made an idea for ceasing the current kings reign, however I have got a few plans up my sleeve. The obvious way is to ‘get rid’ of the king, however I believe that I might not survive to become king. Maybe an ‘accident’ could occur which could leave the king dead. I am very confused and I need thou’s help to help me fulfill my dream. As you can see, with the up most importance, you shall not breathe a word of this letter to anyone.

From, you know who

2 Responses to “Letter to Lady Macbeth”

  • jnorth Says:

    You’ve clearly understood the events have a fair understanding of character. I like that you have tried to embed some of Shakespeare’s language, but do read your targets.

    – always re-read and edit typos when you’re done. Have a look at your first paragraph – there are a few instances where punctuation has been doubled and the wrong conjunction has been used.
    – Similar to this, explore your use of commas – remember to use them to separate clauses – this is done much more successfully in your second paragraph.
    – Can you check your use of inverted commas? I think you could do without the majority of these.

  • hdrewett Says:

    The language you have chosen reflects Macbeth’s status as well as language used in the text, which makes for a believable tone throughout. It is interesting how you have continued Macbeth’s thought process from the moment he mentions that the Prince of Cumberland is a step on which he ‘must fall down or else o’erleap’, which is plausible and does later link in with his thoughts in the play. Make sure to check however, for contradictions that could make your points unclear; such as you say you have ‘no ounce of trust’ I these beings but you wish to ‘question them further’. You could check the text again to decide which point is more accurate or how to sync the ideas together.